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About Ephraim’s Story Chapter 17

I’m done. I’m done, I’m done, I’m done. I finished a thing. It’s been a long time since I finished a big thing like this. (No epilogue, unless someone demands it. But no one’s going to demand it. :3 )

What’s the next thing to finish? Hmmmm… Well, my paper for school, but that’s a little thing. It is very little. This thing clocked in at over 110 pages and over 45,000 words (if I’d written that in a month, DecemberWriMo, lol) but I only wrote the last 20,000 in the last couple of weeks.

Flairé: Only, she says. Heh.

(For comparison, the paper is 8 pages max.)

In the future, I also have the old Zelda fic to finish, as well as the Fire Emblem 7 fics. I would like to finish the old stuff before the newer stuff, you know? It feels more right. But I am intending to finish the Star Wars NaNo next November, and I’m intending to rewrite parts of Esgalwen’s Story so that the ending can happen.

And then there’s those two webcomics…

One thing at a time!

Ephraim’s Story: Chapter 17: Sacred Stone

Chapter 16: Darkling Woods

 

Chapter 17: Sacred Stone

 

Wide stairs led down a hall, down, down, down, until we were well below the ground. Seth trotted up behind Eirika and me, carrying a torch.

Lyon was waiting for us at the bottom of the steps, at the front of a vast dark stone hall. We halted, and we looked at him as he looked silently at us.

“Eirika…” he said, finally. “Ephraim…”

“There’s no need to say anything, Lyon,” I said, and I found it was true. I had forgiven him everything. “We know everything, and we’re sorry.”

“You must kill me now,” he said earnestly. “The Demon King will use my body to revive his own…” He paused, then continued quickly, strain rising in his voice. “You don’t actually know everything. When the Demon King first reached out to me… there was… I must say it… jealousy and envy in my heart. I did not resist as I should have… I am to blame for my unforgivable weakness…”

“No, Lyon. You are not to blame,” Eirika told him. I nodded. Everyone has depressive episodes once in a while. Most people don’t end up unlocking the end of the world, but hey. It happens. “Everyone has weaknesses. I know I do. I’m certain my brother does.” Well, thanks, Eirika. “We do, we do forgive you.” Continue reading

About Ephraim’s Story Chapter 16

Kayyyy second last chapter, here we go! One more!

My sleep cycle is heading west. I’m not sure how to stop it, or even if I want to chase after it. Maybe I’ll try and catch it when it comes back from the east.

I forgot what else I was going to say here. I had things, but they’re gone now.

I’m not sure why I put in the long introduction to this chapter, with Ephraim waking up and everything. Maybe a bit of a breather, before these intense chapters? But they’re not quite as intense as they should be, because Ephraim is very pragmatic and while he’s a bit temperamental, he’s not very demonstrative in this story. Oh, who am I kidding? He’s kind of a boring protagonist when I write him. He’s more interesting than this! I promise you! : P

Someone pointed out the fact that if no one dies, it’s not very tense. Unfortunately it’s a fic based on a game in which it is possible to save every single party member except in cutscenes, so… I’m savin’ ’em.

Also Eirika’s Story is really, really terrible at this corresponding point. I would not suggest reading it ever again. : P This story may not be genius, but it’s better than Eirika’s… I matched it up to the new Frelia’s Finest instead. Thank you, Someone, for teaching me how to write combat better than before.

Ephraim’s Story: Chapter 16: Darkling Woods

Chapter 15: Last Hope          Chapter 17: Sacred Stone

 

Chapter 16: Darkling Woods

 

I woke early the next morning, immediately aware that I had slept in my armour. I had never gotten around to taking it off. I felt creased and rumpled and heavy.

I craned my neck until I could see the window, and groaned. The sky was grey, but the sun was rising behind the clouds; time to get up.

I sat up, stiffly, and stretched. Ow. Falling asleep in armour was definitely a better thing to do outside, where it was less uncomfortable than the ground. Inside, in a featherbed, was really stupid.

I sniffed my shirt. I smelled terrible, and I was still covered in gunk from fighting. Whoever had the unfortunate job of changing the bed after I left… I felt sorry for them. I reached into my pouch and left a gold coin under the pillow. It assuaged my guilty feeling a little bit.

But there would be no time to change. We needed to be ready to leave in an hour, and that meant checking supplies, fixing armour damage, and breakfast. I hopped up, grabbed my lance, and headed for the door.

I checked on Eirika, first. She’d bothered to get changed, into a frilly lace nightgown probably lent her by L’Arachel. She rubbed her eyes blearily as I charged in. “Brother? What’s the matter?”

“Nothing, just time to get up. Come on, sleepy head. Big day today! Killing the Demon King.”

“Mmph.” She rolled over. “But I haven’t slept in a real bed in…”

“Come on, princess. Kingdoms to save! Boyfriend waiting for you!”

“He’s my fiancé, and I’m tired.”

I put my hands on my hips. “Eirika.”

“I’m coming,” she muttered. “I’m just afraid.”

“And comfortable,” I teased. “Sleeping in won’t make the Demon King go away. It’s not like our history finals with Father MacGregor.”

“I said I’m coming,” she said, and waved me out. Continue reading

About Ephraim’s Story Chapter 15

We’re getting close here.

I’m slightly happier with the action in this chapter, for all I threw it out in a few hours. With an Imgur break. It’s not fantastic, but it’s better. It’s certainly better than Eirika’s Story. Oh, Eirika… “we fought hard, and we won! Yay!” that’s how she sees all this fighting. Blah.

Going to practice for a bit, and then when I return… perhaps the last two chapters? That would be awesome. All right! Here goes.

Ephraim’s Story: Chapter 15: Last Hope

Chapter 14: Two Faces of Evil          Chapter 16: Darkling Woods

 

Chapter 15: Last Hope

 

It took some time to get the army reorganized; I wondered if the best thing to do would be to hide the fact that we lost the Sacred Stone. Eirika didn’t need more trouble.

I needn’t have worried. The news had spread by the time we had begun to move again, but it seemed that everyone in the army loved her so much that they would give her some space. Even if they weren’t happy with her.

I supposed that when we got back to Renais – if we ever got back – she should be the public-relations monarch, and I would be the one who did all the other work. That sounded good to me.

First, we had to get back. And our only chance lay ahead, in Rausten. Myrrh told me that the darkness was moving west, but we couldn’t follow it without a Sacred Stone.

We couldn’t stay at Mount Neleras either. Certainly not in the dark. I had torches and torch staves lit, and we travelled northeast, back to Rausten proper.

It took us two more days of travel before we reached the palace, and the land was eerily quiet. Rausten was, I had heard, a contemplative land, a uniformly serene place as inspired by their founder, Saint Latona. But it was not the silence of peace that surrounded us. The land had not yet been despoiled like so many other lands of Magvel, but it was uneasy. War was finally coming to their doorstep. Continue reading

About Ephraim’s Story Chapter 14

Going to finish this story today. Gonna do it.

Here’s a lol for you…

Ummm. Not much else to say. I’m not super-happy with this chapter. It doesn’t flow; doesn’t show Ephraim’s tactical sense very well. Perhaps next chapter, when they’re all in Rausten. After all, Ephraim’s the tactical genius. I’m not. I know a writer has to pretend to be all things, including a genius, but… mehhhhhhh. I’m just going to finish this story and then we can all forget that I ever wrote it, mmkay? Except that I will have written it. Big long practice story. Huzzah.

I levelled up in piano again. Going to get to the next level by the end of the week. I can do this kind of intense practice schedule! I always wondered. XD Now let’s keep doing this intense practice schedule until my recital! : D

Ephraim’s Story: Chapter 14: Two Faces of Evil

Chapter 13: River of Regrets          Chapter 15: Last Hope

 

Chapter 14: Two Faces of Evil

 

Within hours, the scouts had picked up a trail leading north. There was little or no blood, but it was Lyon, for sure. Don’t ask how I knew. I was relieved there was no blood. There was still a chance to save him without killing him.

The main highway to Rausten was further to the east, but the trail led straight north, into the vastness of Darkling Woods. Everyone was on their guard, except perhaps Myrrh.

She flapped up to me at breakfast early the next day.

“Hello Myrrh,” I said, having seen her coming for once. “Is it good to be home?”

She nodded briefly. “I didn’t live here, exactly. But yes, it is home.” She looked around at the black trees. “It is a sad home…”

“Really?” It was certainly gloomy, but if she lived there…

She gave me a small smile. “I know it is a sad place to you humans, but it is also sad for me. …I’m not a very good guardian…”

“Oh, come on,” I said. “You’ve been protecting me ever since Renais. You’re better than Seth, and you know how Seth gets. Or maybe you don’t.”

She shook her head and fiddled with the hem of her cloak in an abstracted, childlike way. “No…”

“Well, when he’s worried about someone…”

“No, that’s not what I meant. But I can see his attachment to Princess Eirika as well as anyone…”

I stared at her. Where was the child? Today she was all dragon. “What did you mean, then?”

Abruptly, she dropped her hands and smiled charmingly at me. “I’d rather not talk about it.” And she skipped away, brushing the trees with her fingertips as she passed them.

Great, first Lyon was going crazy, now Myrrh was.

I watched her waltz up to Saleh, her guardian, and give him a big hug. I couldn’t help but smile. Continue reading

About Ephraim Chapter 13

Well, there’s a chapter of Ephraim’s Story. Four more to go? Hoping to get finished this week. Shouldn’t be too hard now that I’ve found a suitable source of writing music (AC2 OST, whoo). For some reason, in this chapter and the corresponding chapter of Eirika’s Story, Ephraim is the introspective one, and Eirika is the one who notices the battle. Although… in Eirika’s Story, it’s a pretty stupid battle, based on the fact that all my chars were wildly overpowered compared to the enemy grunt troops. I should rewrite that. But I like Ephraim’s introspection, so I’ll probably just leave it.

While going over this, I found two places in the corresponding chapter of Eirika’s Story where I used reflexives incorrectly. This is terribly embarrassing to me, as reflexives are currently a peeve of him when used incorrectly. To sum up: a reflexive pronoun (myself, itself, themselves) is a pronoun used as a direct object of a verb that is acted by and upon the subject. E.g. It cleaned itself. Any other use of a pronoun ending in ‘-self’ is incorrect, but many people don’t know that. That’s why you frequently hear people saying things like “If you have any questions, just ask (Joe or) myself”, unaware that this doesn’t make them sound more formal or intelligent. In fact, it just makes them sound grammatically ignorant. Equally unfortuantely, this doesn’t bother anyone except grammer nazis/paladins. (The correct form would be “…just ask (Joe or) me.” It sounds more informal, but it’s actually not, because it’s correct.)

So anyway, I fixed them. :3

Ephraim’s Story: Chapter 13: River of Regrets

Chapter 12: Ruled by Madness          Chapter 14: Two Faces of Evil

 

Chapter 13: River of Regrets

 

We packed up and left early in the morning, travelling more directly east so as to come around the mountains and then straight north into Rausten. It would be a week’s journey.

The townsfolk had been busy; we’d received several donations of food and even gold during the night. I was touched, and for several days the thought of my upcoming responsibilities weighed heavily on me.

The monsters steered clear of us for many days. I think Jehanna was too hot for them, even though we were more in the cooler, scrubby northern part of it. The Grado Army, too, was in disarray and scattered through the land. I was certain that Ly- the Demon King still commanded an organized part of the army, perhaps several parts. But I didn’t know where they were. I would trust in the scouts.

We found them – or perhaps they found us – by the banks of Jehanna’s Narube River. I was with Eirika, talking about the route for the day, when Innes butted in. Well, I guess he didn’t butt in. Since I had turned command of the Frelian Army back over to him, he’d been part of our tactical council, Seth, Innes, Syrene, and me. It actually felt pretty good, having several sharp minds on the same problem.

Anyway, we’d just been going along, when Innes finally informed us: “I sent the Frelian Army ahead to clear a path for us.” I glanced at Seth and he nodded; he’d known. Why hadn’t I known? I needed to know these things…

Before I could get mad, Tana squeaked from in the sky. “Innes! They’ve been routed! I can only see Syrene’s regiments left! They’ve got civilians with them. Enemy forces are approaching!” Continue reading